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Updated On: Nov 16, 2007

Goli commented on Witness To A Suicide Attempt

Hi,first time I have come on your blog through Shalini, and I must say that I am impressed. I hope to read more.
:D
It is little sad, ( I mean the story that you wrote), I have been quite a regular visitors to one of hte old age homes in bangy, and it is depressing.
Do keep blogging.
:D

Samy commented on On A Gray Day
is waali pe toh achha khaasa discussion hua tha apna, so im not commenting on it again. it would be a repetition..
so, i guess, this brings a temporary halt to my journey of ur blog...
so, come out with something new fatafat! :)

Samy commented on A Magical Year In Magboard
i liked this one this one too.
somehow when u combine poetry with a story, the particulsr style we were discussing last time on the phone, seems to come off as a honest and sincere effort and, thus, touches me in some way or the other.
either i giggle, or i smile, or i start thinking abt the particular subject u wrote upon. some thought process is always initiated.
keep on writing like this, i strongly reccommend that u use this style more often.

Samy commented on My Debilitated Mind
very nice. excellent again! :)
nothing more needs to be mentioned.
though i dont agree with this particular part:

There’s no
Bigger Tragedy than
To sense
The chains
And question them
That means
Moving out of the fold
Being a Rebel
Inviting the wrath
The collective lash
Of all the chains
Defensive.
Tenacious.
Vengeful

questioning ur "chains" isnt in the least "tragic". its challenging, exhilarating,... well, for me. but, then thats my interpretation and opinion.

and i do agree with this one:
The saddest setback
Would however
Be the doubts
Of your mind.
Which had
Dared to wake.
But nevertheless
Had for years
Rested on the
Cradle of chains
Believing them
To be a caress.
The Years fused
The chains
With the Soul
Now they are
One and whole.

and, again , i dont agree with this one:
My mind may question
Every chain
But it cannott
Erase them off.
Without them
There would be no
Me!

particularly, the last two lines:
Without them
There would be no
Me!

but, anyway, thats a matter of personal ideology.
as far as ur poem is concerned--nothing wrong with it at all.


Samy commented on The Black Hole
this one is really good japinder.
thought provoking. though i still believe, it could have been a leettle shorter..but, i know, when one begins writing ...one tends to get carried away.
nevertheless, this one was a good attempt


Samy commented on The Silence
japs darling, u could have done a much better job....i really didnt like this one. it started on a good note...somehow in the middle i lost interest..and at the end i was wondering- why has she written it?...
as always ur expression, ur theme, ur use of language..everything is good...but, it lacks magic, spark.
my dear, i will say the same thing again..i expect something unique and thought provoking everytime i begin to read ur blog. but this one didnt do anything..
u can do, and have done, much much better.
its a matter of treatment of the subject. dont treat it the way anybody wud treat it normally. ur subjects are always interesting. ur way of writing is always good. but, its the complete package that matters.
i am sure if you sit down and begin re-writing this one with the intention of making magic, u most definitely will.
u have that capability. bring it out more often.

Samy commented on Back Into The Olden Days
good work again! brilliant , in fact. i reaaly feel u write prose/poetry better than a normal story.
and i do strongly feel u should explore prose more.
i would love to read more of such prose/poetry pieces.
this one left me longing for more.

Samy commented on Evanescence
excellent! lovely, short and crisp. sparkling wisdom!
i feel u are better at writing poetry/prose than normal stories. though your stories are good too, i like ur poems better.
u should explore prose more.

Japinder commented on Afterwards
Thank You so much Sam...this is the kind of critical comments that I need right now.
Compliments from a person seem worthy only when you know that that person will also criticise what he doesn't like.
I AM gonna rewrite Unknown Intersections, to my satisfaction, and hopefully, to yours too.
I've been getting easy compliments on many of the pieces that I've written without making any special effort. That has left me dissatisfied, coz I want readers who will SAY that they are not good enough, that they need to be worked upon.
Thanks Sam for being one such reader :)
Your praise of Afterwards made me happy, coz this is one poem that I am proud of having written. There are not many such poems yet. There will be. I am sure.

Samy commented on The Sun Will Be Brighter Tomorrow
helloooo and welcome to the world of foodies!!
i dont need to elaborate upon the fact that i cud almost be the girl in the story!!! well...we have discussed a lot on that front already.
now about the story-
let me begin with the good things-
good writing style.
this one did build up a vivid imagery.
good expression.
u have explored into a new segment--writing on topics with a lighter vein.
now, the 'can be improved upon ' part-- just my suggestions-
you could have added a lot more to the story in terms of fiction--taken ur theme a little forward, by adding in elements which dont necessarily exist in ur life, to add more shape to the story.
you could have made the story out-and-out humorous.
abhi bhi aisa nahi hai ki the story doesnt make u laugh, it does. but, this particular capability of the story could be capitalised in a bigger way.

Samy commented on Afterwards
hi japinder
i read three of ur poems today:
after years, flower by the roadside, and afterwards.
i liked the last one the best. this one i know i wud remember years late. beautiful use of words and style.
to be very honest, i didnt like after years. that was the first one i read. it appeared to be bland.
not very satisfied by the experience, i ventured further, and then went on to read flower by the roadside.
that was better than the first one. but it didnt touch me. again, interesting style. but,i really think, ur work should move me as i read it. if it doesnt, it leaves me unsatisfied.
and, the reason i ventured further was that i know Japinder Gill possesses the capability to move a person through her literary abilities. but, why isnt it visible in every poem i read?
thats why i went on to read another one, desperately in search of the one poem/story which mirrors japinder's true potential.
"afterwards" was the one poem which does.
challenge yourself more japinder.
challenge yourself to produce unique works of art everytime u put ur pen to the paper.
dont be easily satisfied with whatever u write....u can write the most excellent of pieces..but, why should that be a once-in-a-while occurance?

Samy commented on Unknown Intersections
hi japs,i'll try and give u my honest feedback. one story per day. i hope it helps.
ok, back to this particular story.
see, we all know u can write well. you have a good expression. that is visible in each of your stories/poems. but, now you need to go beyond that.
you have to buid a compelling narrative...something which brings out some emotion in the reader..one way or the other.
you have picked up a very good theme here. your manner of construction is also very good.
overall the story is good, but, not compelling.
its like..you have everything for an excellent story..good plot,good expression,good construction...but,you just have to bind all the ingredients in a way that results in something unique.
it shuld not evoke a lukewarm response.
a story must paint a vivid picture in my mind, which is left behind, and through which i can remember ur story even 5 months after i read it.i feel a little more elaboration is needed on that front.
your story must compel the reader to say 'wow!' instead of 'good'. you can evoke the latter response effortlessly. its the "wow!" thats challenging and exhilarating.

Samy commented on One Morning With A Heavy Mind
i relate to this one wholly,completely,absolutely,most definitively!!!
every morning i make a promise to myself--i will not let myself slip into the mundane routine. i will indulge into all the exploration i want to. i will suceed in fulfilling all the promises i have made to myself. i will accomplish all targets i have set out for myself.
on some days...i succeed. on some others..i dont.
every morn i lead myself to believe that the vision of utopia i hold in my eyes every waking moment, can & will be created.
i promise myself that my utopia will not just remain a vision. the vision will, one day, meet its physical manifestation.
i can totally understand those 'thousand thoughts droning maddeningly ' in your mind. i answer those thoughts and questions every morning. :)
all i can say is , its good you have those questions troubling you. when these questions stop troubling you, it'll be a really scary situation then.
atleast, right now you are struggling to be true to yourself.
the real enemy lies within ourselves. simple virtues as discipline, patience, perseverance have to be developed.
though, sometimes i feel, my indiscipline is my window to creativity!! i guess, balance is the key.
so, my dear comrade, keep on fighting. the battle should and must have only one end-victory.
unless that particular end is achieved, the battle has not ended.
:)

Deepti commented on Afterwards
hii jappi,,, i have no words to comment on this poem ..still writing the very sipmle words for this beautiful poem that u wrote..
i enjoyed reading it.. and the facts u have used..the love after death and love must happen once..and that the rose will alwys be there as your love....which u urself have reaped...its really beautiful!!!
i have loved your poem same as the girl loved her love...:)

Sukhjot commented on The Black Hole
wonderful flow of words japs..
and then the break... "Could success be superficial?"
amazing..
keep writing!

Deepti commented on I wish we shared more!
hii jappi,,,
ur thought is much more stronger than th epoem u wrote based on this..really awesome thought but practically really difficult to be less defensive about ourselves..and to share our experiences openly with every1 especially unknowns...but i wish there could have such a world.
hey,,,what do u think about the spirit of competition...u know i hate competing any1...but see everywhere all around ppl running for the competition.
competition is when some1 wants to go ahead of others..but what u wrote also promotes a world where every1 will move together,, teaching some1 else and learning from others...in an attempt to make all lives equally good...
but its not possible as equality is not the law of nature...we all are supposed to live differntly as every component of this nature.
If sun starts learning from moon to be calm and silent and moon starts learning from sun to be warm and lightened..life will loose its balance..

smriti aka sammy commented on The Power Of One
yo japs!!
yup, it did take me back, for sure!
uiet was such a rocking time!!
proud and blessed to be an uietian!!

Meer commented...
Nice work done yaar ..
Read jst a few things now ..

Mohit Garg commented on Unknown Intersections
Nicely written.

Mohit Garg commented on My Debilitated Mind
Brilliant post.
(explore and fly away :P)

Vivek Agarwal commented on The Sun Will Be Brighter Tomorrow
Hey,
This is Vivek.. I guess Shalini doesnt pass all the info and gobbles some as tax...thx for liking the stories.. ne favorites..guess going through ur full blog will take time..there is quite a bit thr..bt ur dsign is awesome.. how do u create these formats?? Would like to upgrade mine. My mailid is vivglobal@gmail.com

Shalini commented on The Sun Will Be Brighter Tomorrow
Hahahaha... one day she will make it.. in a dark pink gown (dark helps in shaping up)standing by a huge door against the sea in high tide. She is still ravishing and she will always be. She need not do any compromises coz she doesn't know, her beauty is inner...buiscuits..no matter how many..can never take that away. Eat five more, for this comment. Love uu :)

smriti aka sammy commented on The Poem That Got Completed
oho,,yeh toh galti se mistake ho gaya...
well, those lines seemed to be in perfect tandem with your poem...so that how...well, i am sorry my dear friend..u have a completely valid reason to embarass me.. :)
but, that doesnt mean i didnt read ur poem. it is a beautiful poem.
u should start collecting your poems seriously, and get some published in international journals.
get a step ahead my dear girl!!
ab bahut ho gayi blog pe publishing, now i should expect to see japinder gill's name on the list of published indian authors!!!
start becoming deadly , as in dead serious, about your dream!!!!


Evan commented on Afterwards:
Wow, amazing site! I really like the poems you wrote. I have just started my website, its called www.poetexpress.blogspot.com
I'd like it if you would tell me how to make separete sections, because my website is all a jumble and I want to have a wonderful website such as yours.
Thank you.

Anonymous commented on The Sister Of My Heart
"Thanks sooo much for this beautifully crafted review...reading it has convinced me to read the book and i hope that it is as interesting and fun as u make it sound. i really enjoyed reading ur review and thnx once again for taking the time to write it out...Cheerz!!!"

Japinder commented on The Poem That Got Completed
"Sam, ab yeh to aap sharminda kar rahe ho.....matlab aapne dhyaan se padha bhi nahin :(
Woh lines maine nahin KD ne likhi thi
[tapp tapp]
[Disappointed aansoo]

smriti aka sammy commented on The Poem That Got Completed
"great piece of art, my dear friend.
i like this one the best.. :)
esp the last two lines..
'u remeber that once,
i made u smile!'

award winning stuff.
get ur novel ready soon!"

Himanshu Sahni commented on The Black Hole:
This was one of the most amazing stories i ever read. It started way too off d track as in i had no idea what i was reading and why i was reading until the 3 rd page and i got a glimpse of what dis girl wanted to say. I cud actually relate in bits n pieces to wat "he" was thinking. Ppl know der real self but dey suppress it intentionally because of sum fear within themselves. N sumtimes it s d right way to go because if u r in ur real self u tend to do things which make u satisfied n in d meantime u may ignore so many aspects. It is also possible dat everyone's real self may actually turn out to be d same and what v r actually seeing is something what distinguishes every human being from another.
The world is nt ideal so v r nt supposed to behave ideally here. If u r to survive here, u have to do wat it takes n may be hide ur real self(which i have a feeling might turn out to be d same for everyone)..


Mohit Garg commented on 'The Novel Awakes, the blog yawns':
"All the poetic best.."

Shalini commented on Restlessness:
"Hi Japs,
Visiting this magical blog after a long time and m happy that ur writing passion is on full bloom :)
Hv heard a lot about Coetzee's way of writing and ur post compells me to visit English Book Store asap.
Do keep writing!"

Varun Jindal commented on The Infy Experience- First Impressions:
"Feel great to write comments about my "BIRTHDAY PARTNER"...
I really liked the way you described your Infy experience... Being an Infoscion, I can understand how good it feels when someone joins a company like Infy having unmatched facilities as a fresher... But yes, in my case this experience didn't last too long... We, being humans, gradually get adapted to the kind the atmosphere we are provided with and don't like what we have been provided with... But I hope this should not happen with you... Perhaps, even Himanshi knows that this may not last very long and that's why she suggests Japinder to "Have fun @ Infy, as long as it lasts!" (Exclamation sign has a great importance attached to Himanshi's comments)...

Keep writing Japinder because it feels great to read ur writings!!!"

Prabhjot commented on The Poem That Got Completed:
"the cake was there ... KD jus seems to have put the icing on it !!!!
so .. i guess.. he surely is becoming one of us.. - The Elderly.. :P coz thats the time when you have these amazing amazing thought.. its not for the crazy young blazing guns... or the vodka shots i might say .. people like us r like the scotch or the wine.. which has matured in the oak casks with time.. :P *grin*

and so i complete this poem,
hoping someone. someday will complete mine,
hope that when we meet someday,
u remember that once,
i made u smile!"

awesome.. :)
*Pats KD's back*
thats a job well done my boy .. :)"

Mohit Garg commented on On A Gray Day:
"hmm..9 months and no comments for this one.Is my choice bad or what..
;-)
I like it..MORE!! MORE!!
(Or wud i hv 2 buy your buk..)"

Mohit Garg commented on Are you an Original?
"'this song is sung in chorus.' well, that doesn't necessarily mean that the there's total conformity of ideas(read : submission of self).the 'rebels' may agree on an underlying principle and be part of a rebellion even if their perspectives on the details are different.
"there is one person who actually rebels"..
possible that he is the one who is just providing a vent to a long suppressed 'volcano' , or to an idea whose time has come.Times change.So he cant be blasted for thinking about it first.